Friday, 5 November 2010

Poetry Bus. November 8th.

A Garden Shed Widow's Pipe Dream
(after reading Ariel's Song from "The Tempest")

Full six foot deep my Caddoc lies.
Of his bones are caulis made.
These shallots once were his eyes:
Nothing of him that could fade
but will Scheming Ada riddle
into something edibible.
Bird-scarers hourly chink his knell:
Clink-clank, clink-clank

Oh, how I wish he'd go to...

What's that, dear?  I must have dozed off...


The original, by W.S. (which is linked above) answers
Jessica's sea-themed prompt here for the Poetry Bus, 8th. November.
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15 comments:

  1. Jessica Maybury5 November 2010 at 23:12

    LOL! I loved the ending :) It started out all sombre and then went funny :)

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  2. Dick6 November 2010 at 08:57

    The Bard would be proud! He'd even go for the audacious coining of 'edibible'.

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  3. madamebutterfly6 November 2010 at 09:23

    Thank goodness for the ending ... I have a soft spot for poor old Caddoc - but then I would, I don't have to live with him!

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  4. Doctor FTSE6 November 2010 at 11:31

    I noticed 'edibible" in this snide parody of "Full Fathom Five" - but wondered how many readers would pass it over as simply 'edible', never mind that the line needs Ada's extra syllable. Tells us something about how we read, I guess.

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  5. Jinksy6 November 2010 at 14:16

    Must admit I read 'edibible', but I was either 1) too polite to tell Ada, or 2) decided to put it down to puposeful comic effect. Some people are not so lenient, it seems...

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  6. Britta6 November 2010 at 21:25

    Hahaha, and I read "edible", as Dr. FTSE foresaw... Being only a bear with little language-knowledge, haha. But I loved it even then!
    "Blessed are the poor in spirit, for theirs is the kingdom of heaven" - where I might meet poor Caddoc - but he'll be there out of other reasons - while you, Ada, if you fulfill your dreams, will be Living in Hell - so beware! .

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  7. The Bug6 November 2010 at 22:36

    Whew! I read this yesterday but somehow totally missed what the end meant - I couldn't believe that Caddoc was gone. Love it!

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  8. Anonymous7 November 2010 at 09:14

    Dear Bug,
    Caddoc remains alive and well, believe me! :)

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  9. vivinfrance7 November 2010 at 11:30

    I love edibible! You are a wicked one, Ada, disposing of poor Caddock. Though I'm sure he'd make good compost for the potager.

    The word verification was "tales" - how appropriate!

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  10. NanU7 November 2010 at 15:32

    Edibible indeed. Loved ones are best for a lush garden.

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  11. Kristen Haskell8 November 2010 at 01:26

    Poor sweet Caddoc!

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  12. vivinfrance11 November 2010 at 13:15

    Careful how you go, Ada - Methinks the cad has escaped!

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  13. jinksy11 November 2010 at 13:21

    Vivinfrance - tell me more!

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  14. Jinksy11 November 2010 at 13:29

    Oo, look - I've gone invisible it seems? I'm trying again...

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  15. Jinksy11 November 2010 at 13:31

    Ah, there I am! (Sorry for ignoring you Mrs T, but I begin to smell a rat!)

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